Sexy Sadie

'Lo Ash! The only other thing that could be heard was screams of fear that rang in the air. Instead of 'was screams of fear', use 'were the screams of ...

M. Morose, I said I would crit your first chapter; and I keep my promises. "An e-mail was sent to us from the university," I would put a period at ...

Heya ButterFlyInk, Duncan had fought with me about dad's case, he didn't think that dad was innocent like I did. Instead of a comma after case, use a semi colon. ...

Conrad Rice (I know a guy with the last name Rice), These were men, stuffed and mounted like trophies. Mannequins for someone’s sinister purposes. Instead of that first period, use ...

Conrad, It felt like he was just retreading old ground I copied 'retreading' into my word document, because I wasn't so sure, and it said it wasn't a word. I'm ...

Heya KailaMarie (pretty name, I have to say), Before he e ven This was the only mistake I found, 'e ven' should be 'even', Lol. Very wonderful story! I really ...

Hey, "Sean...Sean.."she moaned, "Please!" The second Sean only has two dots after it, put three. Also, the she should have a space between it and the quotations, instead of this: ...

Hey Prok! First I'd like to say, Congratulations! You're my first review for Saint Razorblade's contest! Not that it means anything, but... Okay, I'll start criting now. :P You wake ...

26, eh, why am I doing this? Oh well, 26, folks! -Sadie

Hey Wifeykins, You told me to be harsh, I'll try! -"Get them! Get them, you useless cowboy! What do you think you're doing? I could ride better than you fools!" ...

Chapman shot six times, but only five hit John Lennon, I should have put that in there. And yes, Chapman was reading while the police were coming to get him, ...

Thank you Bear, I wrote this poem about the man who killed John Lennon. It sounded like you thought I was writing it about something that had not yet happened. ...

Chapman Has a Gun Chapman has a gun, tucked safely in his coat. He hides in the shadows of the Dakota. Limousine pulls up to the curb, a man in ...

This is getting really, really good! I don't really know what to crit, but I can't wait for more! -Sadie

'Lo Nolan (once again) I liked this very much! Your poetry is very deep, you really have to look at it to understand it, rather than read it. If that ...